Does anybody like this poem i writ earlier?

I feel the rain against my skin


I calmly close my eyes


As the pain and misery begin


My souls breaks and cries





With you i am entwined


Without you im confined


To nothingness


Im blind


To the things i've left behind





My soul has fled


My body is hollow


My eyes have bled


Naught but sorrow





I'll stay with you until the end


I will try so hard to mend


The nothingness


Between our disconnected souls


Together we'll cover these holes





My soul, It yearns for you


My body lies lifeless


Our love, It's so true


Without you, I'm a mess





Our souls, They are as one


But now that your gone


Im back into nothingness





I'll find you again


And we will be together


We will no longer feel the pain


We'll be together forever





Our love is stronger than the heavens above


And nothing can keep us apart


Nothing is stronger than our love


And you will ALWAYS have my heart





xx♥xx


Thank you


xx♥xx

Does anybody like this poem i writ earlier?
ppl above me r asswholes...it ws good.the mood was sad.n tob a sad mood it was ok.i kinda liked it.
Reply:Depressing, depressing, very depressing.
Reply:depressing
Reply:cool i like the dark element
Reply:trite, boring, wordy, predictable. Blah. Don't quit your day job.
Reply:I dont want to criticize too much but the work of a poet is too look at the world in different ways and not to succumb to cliches and to produce a work of art that delights the ears. You have done neither of the three.


1. I could find thousands who would say those exact words


2. The cliches are everywhere they scrape upon my ears like a cheese grater, find an idea and try to express in ways never thought of before.


3. Read it out loud as flowing work and you will find it clumpy and ungraceful.


As improvement i would suggest going and buying a poem anthology and reading any great poet, keats for example. Ode to autumn flows, uses no cliches and is like music upon my ears, not to judge you with a genius. Just to improve.
Reply:it is depressing...but it is k.

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